Haru, looks good. You've improved a lot (still much better than me :). A few comments if any of them help:
Boy - The design and all looks very solid and I don't really have anything bad to say about it to be honest. For a Chimney Sweep, he's very clean, but I'll assume this is BEFORE he goes to work. In a cartoon when he's actually working then they'd probably throw more dirt on him.
Dog - Looks good. Though perhaps the hankerchief is hanging down in an odd way. It's just sort of an odd shape at the front, doesn't look quite like soft fabric. I think it's just a matter of having the pieces point more towards the ground.
Dopey Guy - looks good. One comment is that I think you lost the structure in his chest. You have it very round with his high-pants but then the green lines of the shirt seem like they don't quite match. I think maybe they curve in a little too much. It's not as defined as the rest of the drawing.
Evil Guy - I think overall it could be pushed a bit more. The stance is a little too neutral, it's not as interesting as the boy or dopey guy. His expression is also a bit odd. I know he has a weird eye (maybe a glass one?) but I just don't know what he's thinking. His mouth looks like it's smiling, but his left eye's more devious. I think maybe if you just made the smile a little more villainous it would work better.
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Haru, looks good. You've improved a lot (still much better than me :). A few comments if any of them help:
Boy - The design and all looks very solid and I don't really have anything bad to say about it to be honest. For a Chimney Sweep, he's very clean, but I'll assume this is BEFORE he goes to work. In a cartoon when he's actually working then they'd probably throw more dirt on him.
Dog - Looks good. Though perhaps the hankerchief is hanging down in an odd way. It's just sort of an odd shape at the front, doesn't look quite like soft fabric. I think it's just a matter of having the pieces point more towards the ground.
Dopey Guy - looks good. One comment is that I think you lost the structure in his chest. You have it very round with his high-pants but then the green lines of the shirt seem like they don't quite match. I think maybe they curve in a little too much. It's not as defined as the rest of the drawing.
Evil Guy - I think overall it could be pushed a bit more. The stance is a little too neutral, it's not as interesting as the boy or dopey guy. His expression is also a bit odd. I know he has a weird eye (maybe a glass one?) but I just don't know what he's thinking. His mouth looks like it's smiling, but his left eye's more devious. I think maybe if you just made the smile a little more villainous it would work better.
Hope that helps
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